Hey, there! As you are a member of Friendship Circle - or at least one that comments - I thought I'd let you know about this: Since I'm busy writing three solid-foundation novels right now - one of which is co-written, I don't have time for extra clubs. So I'm just letting you know in case you wanted to take over.

fungirl123 on 8/1/2012 7:34:06 PM

Hey, girl! This is Haley from Calling All Writers. There are just some things that have been bugging me about some writings. I mean, I’d want anyone to do this to me! But please don’t be offended by anything I’m trying to explain. Remember that you’re a writer in the club for a reason…and that reason is that you have a talent for writing. <3 Just a few things I wanted to point out to help make you an even better writer—
My biggest – er – pet peeve is grammar. I’ve been obsessed with correcting grammatical errors since I began writing in third grade. Here are a few things I noticed continually from you:
 You don’t really seem to get how dialogue sentences are supposed to be written. Recently, someone told me that most people don’t even care about grammar – and so now I get that – but it is a vital part of making the work even better, along with the riveting plot! ;) Here are a few examples of one of your mistakes:
“No he is at work.” I tell her giving her a confused look.
All declarative – like in your case, which is a statement – and imperative (they both end in periods) sentences should end in commas, and continue with a lowercase letter. So here is the corrected sentence:
“No he is at work,” I tell her giving her a confused look.
And pretty much the same rule goes for exclamatory (!) and interrogative (?). Examples: “Bob, look out!” he exclaimed. “What did you say?” she asked.
 The next thing I noticed was capitalization. This used to be a really confusing topic for me. But the big thing is when you refer to aunts, uncles, moms, and dads. Here is your problem:
-my Dad
-my Mom
See what I mean? The reason that these are incorrect is because a name is capitalized because it’s a title. That’s the reason that we capitalize it when we only say a sentence like, “Mom said no.” Or even something like, “Dad, how are you?” If they were to not to be capitalized, it’d have to be something like this, “My dad said no.” Or something like, “My aunt Mary says hello.”
I know it’s confusing. It’s just something I thought I’d point out since it seemed like you were struggling with it. (Btw, those were all just random examples relating to your problem. )
Just one more thing, then I’ll leave you alone. Sorry this has gotten long! I get in-depth sometimes.
 Your punctuation needs a bit of work. A few more hyphens, commas, semi-colons, etc. would make your writing even more fabulous! ;) Examples:
-“I am so glad we’re friends again Ari.” Should be: “I am so glad we’re friends again, Ari.” Whenever a character is speaking directly to another, there is a comma needed.
- After silently, and might I add quite ninja like, making it to the door… Should be (and it just sounds a bit better): After silently, and quite ninja-like, I might add, making it to the door…
Lastly, I’d add in some contractions to make the writing more realistic. Like instead of saying, “I am so sorry!” make it, “I’m so sorry!” Isn’t is just more practical? ;)

I hope you weren’t offended by any of this! <3 Once again, there’s a reason that you’re part of this club…and that reason is that you’re a really good writer, Kat!

~Haley

fungirl123 on 7/19/2012 1:16:15 PM

WOW! hah thats understandable then ! I never realized our club was the first writing club...thats awesome! I will definitely let you know if we start a new story!

MusicTaughtMeHowToLive on 6/6/2012 10:13:24 PM

Hey how are you!

MusicTaughtMeHowToLive on 5/30/2012 10:23:52 PM

Hey Kat! Could you please check out The Hopeless Writers ASAP, I posted an important message on there and I want all the members to read it. Thanks!

LexilicousCandy on 2/7/2012 4:59:27 PM

Hey kjm109, I thought I'd pass this on, I got it from fungirl, and I really liked it: I know your a good Christian...so am I! I decided to pass this message on to you: When you carry a Bible, the devil gets a headache. When you open it, he collapses. When he sees you reading it, he faints. When he sees you living it, he flees. And just when your about to re-post this, he will try and discourage you. I just defeated him <3
Have a good day

MusicTaughtMeHowToLive on 1/13/2012 2:28:49 PM

hey girly plz join my club!!

just another prob on 12/11/2011 7:35:01 PM

Name: Nicole Benson Age: 15 Appearance: Dark brown curly hair and dark green eyes Style: Anything colorful! Personality: Shy but outgoing around friends, loves family and friends loves to have fun! Talents: Mostly dance but plays volleyball Home city and state: London, Skyville Family: Mom and sister thats a year older Likes: Music, Skateboarding Dancing, snakes and photography Dislikes: spiders! Bio: Wants to be a dancer and her sister is really mean to her but her mom does not believe her. Dad died when she was young in a fire.

NeverSayNeverGirl on 11/30/2011 3:34:30 PM

I'm pretty sure I had the same name on BSG!!! What was your name? Oh and join my club CMT its a lot like wat we did on BSG

laxchickie19 on 11/27/2011 8:23:00 AM

I still would love to you in the Never ending stories. If you don't wan to thats fine, but another idea was maybe to use fun girls idea and put it on that club? I can change the description

Tbarb14 on 11/26/2011 9:50:42 AM

I think that if we stopped the story we have right now and started another, it would interest everyone! We could do different applications and everything! Tell me what you think!
Also, here's the story idea:

There is a boarding school for teens who are multi-talented. You could be an actress, singer/songwriter, sporty girl, or anything! It's in southern L.A. so they are always seeing celebs. We all make a character for a teenage girl (Around the age of 16 or 17) that is talented. What do you think?!?!

-Haley <3

fungirl123 on 11/25/2011 9:05:20 AM

I don't blame you for feeling overwhelmed. I realize that people don't really post on Story Writing anymore because of all of the new writing clubs. Talk to some of the other girls about it. Remember that your the president so you make the last call!

-Haley <3

fungirl123 on 11/24/2011 11:11:02 AM

If you still wanted to be in cALLING aLL WrITeRS, I suggest you post you application so we can make you a writer!


*Haley*

fungirl123 on 11/22/2011 9:14:19 PM

Love your profile pic!!

Miss Crazy on 11/19/2011 7:16:29 PM

Hey join my club
Never Ending Stories
I would luv to have u in it

Tbarb14 on 11/18/2011 7:11:44 AM

As you can see on your club list, Lexi created a club for the story we're writing to make it easier to post, check it out! Haley

fungirl123 on 11/13/2011 9:06:28 PM

Hey! I loved your story and I know how it is with the mods taking a while before approving the comments because GL is so popular now so we're going 2 make a club for it instead. I'll send you the club link but I just had one question about your part. Your escort to the party was Charles and Violet's escort to the party was Charles Wintre so was that a mistake or should I just change my guy's name because I wanted to use Daniel but that was one of the girl's brother's name so... I can just change my characters' name if you want

LexilicousCandy on 11/13/2011 5:00:46 PM

Thanks! We're writing around the late 1890s, I hope that answers your question. Now me & fungirl are trying 2 decide if we should start writing the story and if people send in applications they can just pick up or do you want 2 wait 4 more people before we start writing? Just get back 2 me whenever you can.
X0X0- Lexi <3

LexilicousCandy on 11/11/2011 6:01:58 PM

Actually, I think your research was wrong because debutante balls took place from the times of the early 1800's to like 1910.
x0x0,
Haley <3

fungirl123 on 11/11/2011 5:13:27 PM

Hey! NVM about my last comment on your profile!! Haley

fungirl123 on 11/9/2011 7:21:10 PM

No problem, I really do love the story! and I will definitely be interested when you start another one.

volleyball514 on 11/8/2011 5:57:50 PM

Hey! Ikr? Actually I was gonna leave a comment on here today but then I had to go do something! Haha glad you did that on mine or I would have forgotten!! Wuzzup?

MusicTaughtMeHowToLive on 10/29/2011 8:41:00 PM

It's 100% ok for you to ask! It doesn't bug me at all! But truthfully I don't know where she is... Sorry! If I find anything else out I'll tell you

LexilicousCandy on 10/19/2011 4:41:34 PM

Since this was a story taking place in the 1890s, @Lexi and I found some awesome names from then! Pick away! And if you have questions about it, ask @Lexi because that's where I'll be asking and posting!

GIRLS-
Belle
Lucy
Victoria
Rose
Adeline
Aurora
Blossom
Cherry
Christine
Clementine
Crystal
Isabelle
Lucille
Marguerite
Belle
Lucy
Victoria
Rose

BOYS-
Alexander
Luke
Daniel
William

fungirl123 on 10/14/2011 7:13:10 AM

Hey I haven't seen Skyla in awhile or Ascelina mostly u know where the writers are

Tbarb14 on 9/17/2011 3:59:22 PM